on this visit

Jun 12, 2008 at 9:54 AM
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i was expecting to find you still tucked beneath the exhausted fleece
with crumbled skin wrinkled against flat pillows
and your curls, tangled and damp from night sweats
but the house was awake and empty

messages left on the bathroom mirror
in steamy shower paint
of moisture that i had just missed you
minutes ago
my belongings packed in used cardboard
stacked in the entryway
one next to the other
you did it for me

barren bookshelves
empty and lonely
searching for the words i had collected
of poetry in journals
music, politics, biochemistry
our albums
those pictures
taken in love
on vacation
over fancy french dinners
in a northern snowy city
or hammock naps in the carribbean

on this visit i was a stranger
in a house that was a memory
and i found the boxes heavy
as i moved myself away

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[esto es genial]

Good grief! This brought a tear to my one good eye. Seriously good, my friend. You may want to consider doing more of this, or at least posting your creations. Do you know about RedBubble.com? Great, great site for poetry. I've got some stuff on there.

ekennedy replied to R.G. Ryan’s comment:
Jun 12, 2008
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thanks - i have never heard of RedBubble before, but i am definitely interested and look forward to read what you have written

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i like this

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I like the emotional turn of this. Goes from wistful rmembrances to heartwrench of moving out and moving on...

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This is really really nice

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the best writing is in the reading, the finding of what has touched us, the realization we are not alone in how complicated our feelings seem. loved it.